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The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart demonstrates how many foreign travellers
visit
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visited
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 to coast, lakes and
mountains
 from
Europan
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the Europan
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 region from 1987 to 2007 It can be seen in the chart, there was
a
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an
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 upward trend in the number of people
traveling
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travelling
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 to 3 different areas.
In addition
, many visitors travelled to the coast during the period.
In
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At
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 the beginning of the period, there were about 40000
of
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apply
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people who visited the
coast
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coastal
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 areas.
Then
this
 figure fell slightly in 1992 before climbing to more
70000
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than 70000
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 visitors
in
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at
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 the end of the period. In the year 1987, the number of overseas travellers going to mountainous and lake areas were 20000 and 10000 respectively.After 5 years, there
was
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were
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 roughly 25000 travellers
vistiting
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visiting
 the
mountains
.
Similarly
,the figure for the lakes was
same
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the same
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with
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as
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 the
mountains
.In 2007, the data for the lakes increased
tyo
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to
 50000.Meanwhile, the number of
mountains
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mountain
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 visitors
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descended
descend
descened
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decreased
 to 30000
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mountains with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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