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The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the changes in the number of overseas tourists in three different regions (coast, lakes, and mountains) in each country in Europe. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph demonstrates us information about
tourists
, who
are visited
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have visited
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 three different regions in
in
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Europe in 20 year period. The data is given
in
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to
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 thousands of
people
.
Overall
, as
it
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can be seen from the graph the coast is the most popular destination and
shown
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has shown
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a
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significant growth, the same trend can be seen in
the mountains fans
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the fans of the mountain
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, but it went up
more
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slightly. The
amount
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number
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 of
tourists
, who preferred the lakes
demostrated
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demonstrated
 a substantial jump in the beginning, but it
droped
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dropped
 dramatically in the end.
To begin
 with, in 1987 the amount of
tourists
 in the mountains started from 10000
people
,
then
 reached a peak in 2002
in
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at
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 about 75000
people
 and plummeted to 50000
people
 in 2007. The
amount
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number
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 of
tourists
 who went to the coast began from 40000 in 1987 with a slight drop in 1992 and
then
 it
was
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gradually rocketed to 75000 in 2007.
Also
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 there was an upturn trend in the period given from
tourists
 who preferred the mountains with 20000
people
 in the
beginnig
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beginning
 and about 35000 in the end.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "droped" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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