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The graphs show the smoking status and the percentage of daily smokers by age groups between 1990 and 2010 in Australia.

The graphs show the smoking status and the percentage of daily smokers by age groups between 1990 and 2010 in Australia.
The first graph provides
smoking
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the smoking
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 status of
Austraians
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Australians
 above 14 years,
while
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 the second line graph compares
smokers
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 divided
to
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into
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 three age groups ,both figures show the period from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the number of
non
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non-smokers
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smokers
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 in Australia was the highest
throuhout
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throughout
 the period. There was
significant
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a significant
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 drop in the percentage of people who
classified
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were classified
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 as
smoker
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smokers
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 and
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a
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corssponding
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corresponding
 rise in
ex-
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ex-smokers
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smokers
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 number, and people who had not smoked.
while
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there
ther
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there
 was a little change in
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proportion
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the propotion
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propotion
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proportion
 of
smokers
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 over 50
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years
yearse
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years
,there
were
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was
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dramatic
dramayic
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a dramayic
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 decrease in
number
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the number
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 of younger age
smokers
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words smokers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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