Question: Write a letter to a company asking for a refund for something you bought from them online. In your letter: Describe the item you bought Outline what the problem is Explain why you want a refund Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to request a refund for skincare products that I bought online from your
website
. I
order
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a set of skincare products with toner, serum and moisturizer online from your
website
a week ago.
However
, I have not received any email from your company to inform the progress of my
order
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for
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since
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for
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a week. I tried to look up my
order
online on your
website
,
however
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the
order
status stayed pending.
Also
, I have sent two
email
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to your customer service department to inquire about my skincare
order
and haven't heard back from your company. I am disappointed about the
sevice
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service
your company
had
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delivered, it is far below what you claim
in
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on
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your
website
that
order
will be delivered in one week and prompt action will be taken to assist the customers.
As a result
, I have no idea
wherether
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whether
 my products will be delivered or not and my money has been cut off from
the
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bank account.
Therefore
, I request that you cancel my
order
and provide a full refund
includes
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shipping
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the shipping
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fee. And I assume that the
order
is still pending and it
shoud
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should
not be
enroute
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en route
for delivery. Please reply to my request at your earliest convenience.
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Your
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Yours
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faithfully, Peter Sue
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure clear paragraphing with each paragraph containing a unique idea. A stronger connection between ideas using cohesive devices could further improve the score.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter should begin and end appropriately, following conventions for a formal letter. This has been done satisfactorily.
Task Achievement
Task response requires addressing all prompts fully. Make sure to describe the item accurately, outline the problem, and explain the need for a refund. More details on the item itself could enhance the response.
Task Achievement
Maintain a consistent formal tone throughout the letter. Ensure that you express your concerns respectfully and professionally when requesting a refund.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refund policy
  • Non-functional
  • Defective
  • Misleading
  • Dissatisfaction
  • Return procedure
  • Order reference
  • Product specifications
  • Discrepancy
  • Consumer rights
  • Faulty
  • Merchandise
  • Warranty
  • Compensation
  • Online purchase
  • Transaction details
  • Customer service
  • Remedy action
  • Substandard
  • Item condition
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