The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural

and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows
the
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apply
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Australia
's people living
on
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in
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the
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cities
,
town
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towns
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and rural
area
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areas
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between 1995 and 2010. The higher
population
(in or out) the
cities
than
towns
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in towns
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and rural
area
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areas
show examples
. The pattern of born in our born out have
a
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different in
Asutralia
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Australia
.
However
, the lowest one
in
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is in
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rural
area
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areas
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than towns and
cities
. Towns
be
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are
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a middle living in
australia
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Australia
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. Number
population
living in the
cities
are increasing every month,
50
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with 50
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- 65 peoples born in
the
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Australia's
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Australia
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Cities
, 60 - 80 people born outside
in
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of
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the
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Australia
's
Cities
. But in the rural mostly decreasing. 30 - 18 born in the
Australia
's rural
area
and 40 - 10 born in the
Australia
's rural
area
. Absolutly
different
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differences
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of
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in
show examples
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the population
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population
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populations
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between the are can determine how
place
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the place
a place
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of
base
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the base
a base
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on the data shows living in the town as a middle
population
, living in the rural be low
polulation
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population
and
cities
be most
population
in
Australia
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, cities, area, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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