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The table below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities.

The table below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities.
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A glance at a table provided reveals the amount of
time
 spent by UK males and females → nên muốn ghi số nhiều thì là
men
 and
women
 nhé on diverse daily activities,counted in
hourS
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hours
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 and
minuteS
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minutes
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 per day.
Overall
,the first place was taken up by the
time
 spent on sleep in both genders. In terms of the amount of
time
 spent on personal demand,sleep takes up a majority of
time
 in a day with over 8 hours in both sexes.Other activities namely resting ,eating and drinking
as well as
 personal care made up a miniscule out of
time
,can be grouped into the range from 0,4 to 1,25. As for the
time
 spent on amusements,
men
's total
time
 splurged on leisure is greater than that of
women
.To be more specific,watching TV and listening to music are recreational activities which
is
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are
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 given the highest preference with over 2 hours for both genders,narrowly followed by
that
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apply
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of
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social life and culture with less than 1 hour compared to the previous data.Meanwhile,
that
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apply
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of
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apply
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the sport
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sport
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 take up the least amount of
time
 in a day . The remaining
such
 as hobbies and games
as well as
 reading can range from 0.23 to 0.37. Regarding the
time
 spent on work and personal individual responsibility, most
men
's
time
 spent on them is less than that of
women
 except for employment and study
along with
 travel with 3.45 and 1.32 respectively.In
a
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stark contrast ,the
time
 spent on housework
of
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by
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women
 is twice as much as that of
men
 with exactly 3.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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