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The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram provides
an information
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information
a piece of information
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 about how rainwater is collected and
then
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 becomes drinkable
water
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 after plenty of procedures in an Australian town.
Overall
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, it is visible that much equipment was made under the ground to filter the
water
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, to combine the
water
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 in
a
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apply
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storage, followed by
water
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 treatment by using chemicals,
as a result
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,
become
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became
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everybody
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everybody's
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 well-known drinking
water
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.
To begin
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 with, there is a specially constructed tube which is attached to the house for draining the rainwater into
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water
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the water
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 filter machine.
Subsequently
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,already cleaned
water
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 is poured into the storage from where the
water
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 is transported with the special tube into the
water
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 treatment process.
Afterward
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,with the help of chemicals that are mixed with
water
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 ,
water
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 becomes purified and safe to drink. Later on,
well processed
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well-processed
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water
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 appears in all houses when people turn on the faucet.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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