You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter ● describe the problem with the equipment ● explain what happened when you phoned the shop ● say what you would like the manager to do.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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letter to complain about the malfunctioning of a product and poor customer service at your store. I am a regular customer of your store and
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weeks ago I bought an air fryer. In the beginning, it was working perfectly, but after some days it was not functioning properly. The problem I am facing with the product is that it does not maintain temperature. As soon as
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across the problem, I made a call to the store and none of your employees
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ready to help. My call has been put on
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hold for more than 30 minutes and they keep transferring to
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of staff.
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act was repeated every time I made a call to solve my problem. Now, I would like you to consider
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matter yourself and please help me out with
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. Please let me know
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my equipment could be repaired under warranties, or I would like to request a refund for my purchase. I look forward to hearing from you,
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faithfully
Sehbaz
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Shahbaz
Singh
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