The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The pie charts compare several activities
were
done by Unnecessary verb
apply
the
working adults in a certain country in 1985 and 2008.
Correct article usage
apply
Overall
, career people
mostly loved
to spend their time Wrong verb form
love
to
working Change preposition
on
activity
, Fix the agreement mistake
activities
while
least
of them Correct article usage
the least
are
barely Unnecessary verb
apply
hangout
with significant others Correct your spelling
hang out
throught
the changing period.
In 1958, more than one-third Correct your spelling
through
throughout
from
the total number of working Change preposition
of
people
already busying themselves to finished their job, and that amount rose to 42% in 2008. Among other activites
, the same case Correct your spelling
activities
also
happen
Wrong verb form
happened
on
folks who Change preposition
to
choose
to Wrong verb form
chose
relaxing
at home which increased by 5% from Change the verb
relax
the
total of 8%. Correct article usage
a
Although
the occassion
on Correct your spelling
occasion
traveling
to work might become the least Change the spelling
travelling
in
the beginning of the period, it increased to 8% eventually, which shared the same number with Change the preposition
at
people
who do other interests or playing sports.
In addition
, sleeping become the second highest activity that has done
by working Add a missing verb
been done
people
, although
it decline
by 7% 50 years later. The decreasing event, Wrong verb form
declined
however
, also
occurs on
Change preposition
in
people
who choose to have a
quality time with friends and family, as Correct article usage
apply
on
the end of Change preposition
at
period
, the total number only accounted for 6%, making it the least activity Add an article
the period
that is
favoured by career people
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