The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The
given
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pie chart diagrams represents the difference between 1958 and 2008
of
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in
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adult sharing their time in different activities in a country.
Overall
, over a span of several years, it can be clearly observed that people did not go through any major significant transformation in their working activity. There are slight changes in working, sleeping and going out with family and friends.
To begin
with 1958, as per the given representation 33% persons were
workoholic
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workers
, 8% of individuals spent their time
in
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apply
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relaxing at home followed by 32%
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who like
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like
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liked
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to
sleeping
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sleep
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and only 2% of people
are
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travelling to work, where 19% of human beings went out with their family and friends followed by 6% humans had other interests or playing sports. Comparatively in 2008, individual changed their working habits by 42%, later relaxing at home
also
increased by 5% to 13%, but sleeping habit
are
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decreased to 25% followed by going out with friends and family by 6%,
although
there were changes in travel to work from 2% to 8% and same with other interests or playing sports 8%.
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