The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to English,in 2000 and 2010

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to English,in 2000 and 2010
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The two pie charts illustrate the distribution of different linguistic abilities among British students who knew English at one university between 2000 and 2010 .
Firstly
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, it is immediately noticeable that a great number of students in 2000 spoke only Spanish and in 2010 they increased
at
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5 % , from 30 to 35 respectively .
In contrast
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,
who
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those who
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knew two other languages and only German still
remain
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remained
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unchanged
during
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for
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10 years and was equal to 10 per cent .
Secondly
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, the number of
bilingual
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bilinguals
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grew
up
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from 15 to 20 and only the native English speakers
vice-versa
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and vice-versa
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decreased by half .
In addition
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, in 2000 British who were able to speak in French more than 5 % in comparison with 2010 , 15 and 10 % . Looking from an
overall
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perspective ,
majority
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the majority
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of British students could speak
at
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apply
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Spanish in two different
period
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periods
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of time .
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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