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IELTS Essay Task 1: Australian Residents The line chart details the proportion of residents living in Australia in millions from different regions between 1976 and 2011.

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The line chart below illustrates the number of people living in Australia from different localities between 1976 and 2011.
Overall
, the total number of residents has always been relatively the same but started to increase in the late 90’s. Over the time period, the figures increased for
other
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 and
Asia
 but decreased for the UK. Looking at the chart in more detail, the total number of residents gradually declined from 23
million
 to 18 from 1976 to 1996. In 2001the statistics rose to the original figures and increased even more to 25
million
 in 2011.The data for
Asia
 and the UK have always been interlinked. In 1976, there were around double the people living in the Other region than
Asia
, these figures respectively being 6 and 12. These both steadily inclined until 2006, where Other overtook
Asia
,
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Asia
 finished above Other with 15
million
 compared to 13. The UK started with the majority of people in 1976 at around 14. Over the next 10
years
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 there was
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a slight
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 fall to 10
,
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 before a dramatic decline occurred to 5
million
 in 2011.
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introduction conclusion present
Make sure to write a clear introduction stating what is being shown in the chart, followed by an overview summarizing the key trends before moving into the body of the essay.
logical structure
Ensure that there is a clear logical structure, with each paragraph focusing on different aspects of the chart. Use a variety of cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs.
supported main points
Provide support for the main points with specific data from the chart, while being careful not to describe every detail. Focus on comparing, contrasting, and summarizing significant trends.
complete response
Address all parts of the task, ensuring that you report the data for the given time period accurately and make comparisons where relevant.
clear comprehensive ideas
Aim to present ideas clearly and comprehensively by organizing the essay into clear paragraphs, each of which should have a clear central idea. Some sentences are descriptive but lack a comprehensive analytical approach.
relevant specific examples
Make sure to use specific examples and data from the chart to illustrate trends and support your descriptions. Avoid general statements.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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