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The chart below shows the promotions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010. Summarise and write the information in about 150 words making relevant comparisons

The chart below shows the promotions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010. Summarise and write the information in about 150 words making relevant comparisons
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A glance at the two charts provided represents the proportion of British
students
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 who were capable of speaking languages other than English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, it is evident from the information supplied that Spanish was the preferred
language
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 by university
students
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 in the UK;
while
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German
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language
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 had no significant change during the period given.
To begin
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 with, in 2000 English was the second biggest percentage accounting for 20% after Spanish.
While
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 French and
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other language
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Language
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 categories can be spoken by 15% of the whole proportion,
students
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 who could speak German and two other languages only contributed 10%.
On the other hand
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, the percentage of
students
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 who could speak English declined steadily to 10% in 2010.
Similarly
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, there was
also
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 a considerable decrease in
students
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 who could speak French;
whereas
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 those who could speak another
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 saw a significant growth and contributed to 20% of the whole percentage.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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