The bar chart belows shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men
and women aged 15 and over 65 who did regular exercise in 2010. Overall
, the figures of women who worked out steadily were relatively higher than those of men
. While
almost all of men
groups which didn't reachCorrect article usage
the men
for
50% accounted for over Change preposition
apply
the
half in Correct article usage
apply
this
graph.
Looking more closely, in terms of male
, people Fix the agreement mistake
males
that
exercised regularly Correct pronoun usage
who
in
15 to 24 years old were significantly higher than other Change preposition
from
men
age groups, Correct your spelling
male
although
the figures of the
most Correct article usage
apply
men
's age groups made up the lowest portions than those of women.Submitted by chicken on
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