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The graphs below show the post-school qualifications held by Canadians in the age groups 25 to 35 and 45 to 55. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graphs below show the post-school qualifications held by Canadians in the age groups 25 to 35 and 45 to 55. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The assigned pie chart illustrates information on the post-school qualification held by Canadian
students
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 in the
age
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 groups of 25 to 35 and 45 to 55. These citizens held
degrees
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 in different nine streams and the total of candidates included 729000. It is evident from the pie chart that the highest number of
students
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 enrolled in social which was the same was almost 21% and humanities
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 had a constant number of
students
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 who held a degree in it which was 5%.
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, adults and seniors held
degrees
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 in MBA which was doubled by 3%. ,Whilst the lowest subject was other which pupils were held degree by 25 to 35% and 45 to 55% it was accounted 3%. Probing ahead, the Remaining rest of subjects held degree by Canadian
students
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 were in
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, Education and nursing it was nearly (about 19% to 15%, 15% to 13% and 7% to 11% respectively).
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, science, math and computers were 45 too, 55
age
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 one-tenth and 25 to 35
age
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 groups were more than one-tenth. Eventually, In engineering 9 to 19% of learners held
degrees
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.
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, In all subjects Canadian
students
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 same 100% both
students
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 distinct subjects the ages 25 to 35 and 45 to 55
age
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 groups were held
degrees
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.
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, the highest pupils held
degrees
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 in social and the lowest held
degrees
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 in others and humanities.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, age, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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