The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram illustrates by which

rain

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rainwater

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water

is processed before it is ready to be consumed by a certain citizen in Australia. In general, there are several stages involved in the process,

started

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starting

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with

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collecting rainwater and

ended

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ending

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with

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using

chemical

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chemicals

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before it is ready to be consumed.

According to

the diagram, the process involves

natural

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a natural

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phenomenon,

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apply

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which

it is

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started

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starts

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when rain

is falling

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falls

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. Following that, the rainwater is

being

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collected and pipes are used to help the

water

flows

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to the

water

filter. In

this

filter, other particles

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being separated from the

water

. After the filtration, the

water

is stored in a reservoir before it is ready to be transferred to the

water

treatment. In

this

treatment,

chemical

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the chemical

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is used to precipitate other particles that

left

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are left

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in the

water

Finally

, the

water

is ready to be consumed

for

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public

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the public

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such

as for

the

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apply

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residence

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residences

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, hospitals,

school

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schools

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, or other public facilities.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

154 words

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Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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