The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates by which
rain
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water
is processed before it is ready to be consumed by a certain citizen in Australia. In general, there are several stages involved in the process,
started
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by
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collecting rainwater and
ended
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ending
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by
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using
chemical
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before it is ready to be consumed.
According to
the diagram, the process involves
natural
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phenomenon,
in
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which
it is
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started
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when rain
is falling
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. Following that, the rainwater is
being
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collected and pipes are used to help the
water
flows
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to the
water
filter. In
this
filter, other particles
is
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being separated from the
water
. After the filtration, the
water
is stored in a reservoir before it is ready to be transferred to the
water
treatment. In
this
treatment,
chemical
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the chemical
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is used to precipitate other particles that
left
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in the
water
.
Finally
, the
water
is ready to be consumed
for
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public
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the public
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,
such
as for
the
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residence
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residences
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, hospitals,
school
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schools
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, or other public facilities.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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