The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to English,in 2000 and 2010

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the amount of UK students from one particular university in England who can communicate in different languages other than English in the

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2000 and 2010. It is clearly seen that, in both

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years Spanish

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is been dominant and has increased by

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amount, whilst

German

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has not shown any changes but

French

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has reduced its share. As per the figures demonstrated,

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highest

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spoken

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in 2000 with 30% of

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, which later increased by another 5% in the

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2010. The

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group could communicate only in English and

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at 20% in the first

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later the number dropped by half in 2010.

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languages spoken were increased from 15% in

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year

to 20% in 2010.

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was at identical value with

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in 2000, which decreased by 5% after a decade.

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were at 10% and 20% respectively and in 2010 it was increased by 50% and 100% each.

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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to English,in 2000 and 2010

People follow interests and have hobbies. Do you Think it is good to have hobbies? How can people learn from hobbies

Overall, men are more satisfied with local conditions than women.

With the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper books. Some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this?

Some people assert that history has little value in the contemporary world. But some believe that history is needed today to learn from the past. Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.