You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. 

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

Write at least 150 words.
The charts provided
the
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data about the
percentage
of
computer
ownership
from 2002 to 2010,
as well as
the distribution by
education
level
during
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between
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2002 and 2010.
Computer
ownership
increased incrementally between 2002 and 2010.
Disaggregate
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Disaggregated
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by the educational
level
, the
percentage
of
computer
ownership
increased from 2002 to 2010.
However
, the changes
of
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in
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computer
ownership
were bigger among those with lower
education
level
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levels
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compared to those with higher
education
level
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levels
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.
For instance
, between 2002 and 2010,
computer
ownership
among those who had not completed college or lower
education
level
approximately
increase
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increased
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by 30
percentage
points.
This
number was higher than the increase among those
who
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with a bachelor’s degree and postgraduate qualification. In conclusion, the
percentage
of people who owned computers increased between 2002 and 2010. The increase
of
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in
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computer
ownership
was higher among those who had not completed college or lower
education
level
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, computer, ownership, education, level with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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