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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts provided
the
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apply
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data about the
percentage
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 of
computer
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ownership
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 from 2002 to 2010,
as well as
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 the distribution by
education
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level
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during
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between
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 2002 and 2010.
Computer
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ownership
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 increased incrementally between 2002 and 2010.
Disaggregate
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 by the educational
level
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, the
percentage
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 of
computer
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ownership
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 increased from 2002 to 2010.
However
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, the changes
of
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in
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computer
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ownership
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 were bigger among those with lower
education
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level
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levels
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 compared to those with higher
education
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level
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levels
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.
For instance
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, between 2002 and 2010,
computer
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ownership
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 among those who had not completed college or lower
education
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level
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 approximately
increase
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 by 30
percentage
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 points.
This
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 number was higher than the increase among those
who
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with a bachelor’s degree and postgraduate qualification. In conclusion, the
percentage
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 of people who owned computers increased between 2002 and 2010. The increase
of
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in
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computer
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ownership
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 was higher among those who had not completed college or lower
education
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level
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, computer, ownership, education, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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