the shown line graph demonstrates the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries and the diagram presents the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

the shown line graph demonstrates the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries and the diagram presents the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
The line chart illustrates how many
books
were borrowed from June to September
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2014 from four different village
libraries
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and
the pie graph shows the ratio of genres of
books
that
borrowed
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from these
libraries
.
Overall
, the number of
books
that were
barrowed
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borrowed
from West Eaton and Church Mounth
libraries
increased gradually over time,
this
value decreased consistently for
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in Ryeslip. The primary type of
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books
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fiction throughout the period. In June, the number of
books
which were
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borrowed
from West Eaton and Church Mounth
libraries
was 50 and
this
value increased for the former to 150 over the two months before remaining relatively constant at
this
level. The latter library exhibited a similar trend but reached 150
books
at the end
of the period.
While
the number of borrowed
books
decreased moderately from around 300 to approximately 175 over the period,
this
value varied between 100 to 300
books
for a library in Sutton Wood. There were five different types of
books
that were borrowed,
therefore
, the primary type was fiction with just over 40%. The second-highest was biography with nearly a fifth
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followed by history and science with 14%. The lowest proportion of book categories belonged to self-help
books
with a tenth during 4 months in 2014.
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