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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA
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The pie chart illustrates the total proportion of three types of nutrients added in specific meals in The United States, which could be harmful to their body if they eat too much.
Overall
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, most American meals contain high
sodium
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 and saturated fat in dinner compared to other nutrients except sugar, which is mostly added in snacks.
To begin
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 with, the highest amount of
sodium
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 and saturated fat in The US food is dinner, accounting for 43% and 37%, respectively.
In contrast
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, only a
little
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small
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 amount of those nutrients, with 21% saturated fat and 14%
sodium
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, are
founded
Verb problem
found
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 in
snack
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snacks
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.
This
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 is because a considerable amount of sugar
is dominated
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dominates
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 the total proportion, about 42%.
On the other hand
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, the composition of
sodium
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 and saturated in lunch is slightly higher than in breakfast by nearly 10 points.
However
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, The proportion of added sugar in breakfast (16%) and lunch (19%) almost remains the same.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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