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The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.
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The supplied graph makes comparisons between married
women
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 and
men
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 in terms of the average
hours
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 spent on unpaid
work
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such
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 as childcare in the home, housework, and gardening.
Overall
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, it can be seen that married
women
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 have the highest working
hours
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 compared to married
men
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.
This
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 number rises with the increase in
children
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's numbers. In detail, married
women
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 without
children
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work
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 around 30
hours
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 per week.
This
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 figure soured by 20
hours
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 after having 1 or 2 kids. It is noticeable that
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women
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for women
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 with three
children
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 or more The quantity of
hours
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 spent looking after their
children
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 and doing housework is double that of
women
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 with no
children
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, at about 60
hours
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. Regarding married
men
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, like married
women
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 without
children
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, they
work
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 18
hours
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 per week doing household chores. An exact number can be shown for
men
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 who either have one or two kids.
However
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, males with 3
children
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 and more experienced a lower amount of
hours
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on
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of
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 unpaid
work
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 at 16
hours
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 per week
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men, hours, work, children with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • unpaid work
  • categories
  • average hours
  • men
  • women
  • comparison
  • overview
  • highest
  • differences
  • reasons
  • childcare
  • housework
  • gardening
  • gender roles
  • societal expectations
  • cultural norms
  • work-life balance
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