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The pie chart below shows the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.

The pie chart below shows the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.
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The two pie charts illustrate the proportion of five different types of
energy
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 produced in France in 1995 and 2005.
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, coal and gas were the most significant suppliers of
energy
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 in both years. All sources of power displayed an increase in production with the exception of
petro
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who
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 observed a fall in supply. There was minimal change over the
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ten-year
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 period. The largest suppliers of
energy
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 in 1995 were coal and gas with 29.80% and 29.63% respectively. Both these sources showed a slight
raise
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rise
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 of about 1% in ten years. In 1995,
petro
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 was
also
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 a leading manufacturer of power with 29.27%.
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,
petro
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 suffered a substantial fall in production to 19.55%.
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 was the only
energy
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 source
who
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 observed a decrease in manufacturing. Nuclear and other represented the smallest areas of
energy
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 production in 1995 with 6.40% and 4.90% respectively. Both
theses
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these
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 areas each had about
a
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apply
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5% in the
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ten-year
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 period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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