You and some of your friends want to start a weekly dance club, and you have found a hall that would be suitable to hold your meetings. Write a letter of the hall. In your letter: Explain the dance project Ask if it is possible to rent the hall and under what terms State what day and times you would like to use the hall
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Have a good day!
Yours Faithfully
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coherence cohesion
There are structural problems in the letter that impair its readability, such as inconsistent formatting, lack of clear paragraphing, and general disorganization. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear purpose, and the letter has a logical structure from the introduction to the conclusion.
task achievement
While the main purpose of the letter is presented, there are discrepancies in the dates mentioned, which can confuse the reader. Be clear and consistent with the information provided. Additionally, there is a lack of detail regarding the 'dance project', which should be elaborated upon to fully achieve the task.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is somewhat informal and contains errors that do not reflect the formal tone expected in a letter of this nature. Use an appropriate level of formality, including correct salutations and sign-offs, and ensure that the language used is professional.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,