The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
#bar #line #temperatures #suit #sales #york #first #months #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The graphics give information about the average temperatures per month and
also
the revenue
collected from bathing suits in New York during a six-month period in 2012.
It is obvious that the coldest months are January and February, where the temperature is nearly invariable. Moreover
, the temperature begins a steady rise until summer ends in June. However
, despite these high temperatures in May and June, the revenue
from bathing suits recorded its lowest numbers during this
period.
Bathing suit sales begin
to rise gradually in the first 3 months and Wrong verb form
began
reach
a Wrong verb form
reached
revenue
of one hundred and fifty dollars, and this
has doubled since a surge occurred in April, which correlates with the hot weather. Then
this
number downgrades to nearly twenty dollars at the end
of the season.
Overall
, the demand for bathing suits occurs for the first four months of the year, while
temperature boosts. Furthermore
, revenue
degrades as the summer ends in June.Submitted by amrmohsen12 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words revenue with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
▼
Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+
Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!