The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The graphics give information about the average temperatures per month and
also
the Linking Words
revenue
collected from bathing suits in New York during a six-month period in 2012.
It is obvious that the coldest months are January and February, where the temperature is nearly invariable. Use synonyms
Moreover
, the temperature begins a steady rise until summer ends in June. Linking Words
However
, despite these high temperatures in May and June, the Linking Words
revenue
from bathing suits recorded its lowest numbers during Use synonyms
this
period.
Bathing suit sales Linking Words
begin
to rise gradually in the first 3 months and Wrong verb form
began
reach
a Wrong verb form
reached
revenue
of one hundred and fifty dollars, and Use synonyms
this
has doubled since a surge occurred in April, which correlates with the hot weather. Linking Words
Then
Linking Words
this
number downgrades to nearly twenty dollars Linking Words
at the end
of the season.
Linking Words
Overall
, the demand for bathing suits occurs for the first four months of the year, Linking Words
while
temperature boosts. Linking Words
Furthermore
, Linking Words
revenue
degrades as the summer ends in June.Use synonyms
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