The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

You should write at least 150 words.
This
essay will describe the pie charts presented above which
showing
Wrong verb form
show
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the different activities of working adults and the
time
they spent
within
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between
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the
year
Fix the agreement mistake
years
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of
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apply
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1958 and 2008 in certain
country
Fix the agreement mistake
countries
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. As
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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can be predicted, for working adults, the
activity
that
spent
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spend
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most
Correct article usage
the most
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time
is working, it is applied for
both
years as well. Sleeping is the second most
time spending
Add a hyphen
time-spending
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activity
, which
also
Add a missing verb
has also
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seen
Add a missing verb
been seen
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for
both
years.
However
, the
time
percentage they spent for
both
years and
both
activities is different. As
per
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of
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1958, working and sleeping only
takes
Correct subject-verb agreement
take
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about the same percentages, which are 33% for working and 32% for sleeping. But, for the year
of
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apply
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2008, only working
that is
Verb problem
hours
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increasing
Wrong verb form
increased
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in its percentages by 9%, but sleeping
time
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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decreased
about
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by about
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7% in 2008. The smallest
time consuming
Add a hyphen
time-consuming
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activity
for 1958 is travel
time
to work by 2%. But the result is different for 2008, the smallest
time
they spent on an
activity
is surprisingly, going out, which was originally 19% in 1958, but
decreasing
Wrong verb form
decreased
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for
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by
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about 13%, and became only 6% in 2008.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, activity, both with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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