Nowadays, some business
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the employee's social
skills
are more significant than their school
success
,
whereas
, some
employers
consider academic qualifications
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the other
skills
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in their education life, they already
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considerable
skills
such
as communication, open-mindedness, patience, empathy. I agree with
this
first opinion and will explain with more details and some practical examples.
Firstly
, the realms of science and technology have considerable advantages and wield diverse impacts on society.
Although
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these advances provide many qualifications, they
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not social
skills
.
Employers
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characteristics as far as their
success
. In the
work
environment, each employee's good relationship with others increases
work
performance, which is a good opportunity for
employers
. Harmonious working
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and employee satisfaction increase both early completion of
work
and earnings.
For
this
reason,
employers
prefer to employ
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individuals with good communication
skills
as well as
success
.
For example
,
according to
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magazine, seventy
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of
employers
hire employees who have a
work
-life balance, high communication
skills
and know what they want.
Secondly
,
on the other hand
, some business
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give priority
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academic qualifications. They consider that these qualified people will be
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in all their life fields.
Furthermore
, these competent people tend to do their
work
faster and more accurately.
according to
these
employers
, the most
factor in business life is not doing the job, but doing the job without mistakes. Companies can support
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person by paying attention to their experience and the part which they contribute to
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ability. For them, social
skills
are not very crucial, anyway, everyone should
work
individually in a workplace and should not prepare the ground for socialising.
In conclusion,
Although
, social
skills
are important for some
employers
, for others it is the
success
of the employees
that is
completely vital. I think that social gains bring
success
in people's lives, after all, none of us are robots.