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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricy in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricy in 2014.
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The bar chart illustrates the highest countries for the generation and
consumption
 of electricity in 2014.
Overall
, a glance at a bar chart reveals that China is placed
to
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 the top of the chart. The highest amount of production and
consumption
was belonged
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 to China
beacause
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because
 of the huge
valume
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volume
 of its population, so it is fairly enough. In terms of
United
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states
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, it was
second
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 rank
about
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 production and
consumption
 (4.099 and 3.866 respectively).
Interestingely
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Interestingly
 enough, the least generation and
consumption
electricity
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of electricity
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 for Korea
that
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made up negligible as they
were
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both had nearby similar figures at 485 and 449. As
regard
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with
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production , all
countries
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the countries
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generate
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 electricity exceeded that of
consume
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 that, except
Germany that
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Germany's
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consumption
consumpsion
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consumption
of
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this
 country hit
at
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582.5 in the given period,
whereas
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juste
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just
 under that (almost 528.6)
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