The bar chart below shows the percentage od Australian men an women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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distribution
different
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the different
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ranges
female
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females
activities
regularly in 2010 in the
Australia.
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apply
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, it is evident that elderly people didn't
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activities
, on the other hand
, young men
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however,
women
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the age
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35- 64 tend to do physical activities
.
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males
men
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the age
range
of 15 to 24 were very active in pysical
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physical
activities
, nonetheless
, by increasing the age
range
it dropped, and the lowest percentage
belonged to 35-44 years old. However
, the decreasing trend changed, and it slightly increase
by getting old.
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increased
percentage
for
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of
women
was in middle age
( 45-54 years old). the physical activities
for youngest
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the youngest
women
was
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were
women
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comparison
men
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