The bar chart below shows the percentage od Australian men an women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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distribution
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females
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regularly in 2010 in the
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activities
, on the other hand
, young men
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women
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the age
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35- 64 tend to do physical activities
.
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males
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the age
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of 15 to 24 were very active in pysical
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physical
activities
, nonetheless
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range
it dropped, and the lowest percentage
belonged to 35-44 years old. However
, the decreasing trend changed, and it slightly increase
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women
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the youngest
women
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women
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