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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar
chart
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 depicts the number of
exports
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 made by a country in five categories namely Petroleum
products
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, Engineered goods,
Gems
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 and
Jewelry
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, Agricultural
products
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, and
Textiles
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 between 2015 and 2016,
while
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 the table
chart
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 presents the alteration of values percentage in the same period.
Overall
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, the percentages of the
exports
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 increased in the latter year based on the first
chart
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,
while
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according to
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 the second
chart
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,
Textiles
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 was the category which made the highest changes in values and
Gems
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 and
Jewelry
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 was the only category which witnessed a decreasing trend. First of all, in 2015 Petroleum
products
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 achieved the highest number of
exports
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 with over 60
billion
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, followed by Engineer goods with more than 50
billion
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,
Gems
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 and
Jewelry
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 totaling above 40
billion
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, Agricultural
products
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 were 30
billion
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 and
Textiles
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 with just about 25
billion
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.
However
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, in the next year, all the
products
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 experienced increasing
exports
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 except
Gems
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 and
Jewelry
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exports
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 which fell down about 5.18% and earned almost 40
billion
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 , unlike the previous year. For Petroleum
products
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, Engineer goods, Agricultural
products
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 and
Textiles
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, the percentages of
exports
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 increased by 3%, 8.5%, 0.81%, and 15.24% respectively.
Textiles
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 experienced the highest alteration,
while
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 Agricultural
products
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 had the opposite trend.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, exports, products, gems, jewelry, textiles, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • economic sector
  • percentage change
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • year-on-year comparison
  • significant growth/decline
  • stagnation
  • market dynamics
  • fiscal repercussions
  • trade balance
  • competitive advantage
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