The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015.

The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015.
The column chart illustrates
amount
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the amount
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of
voluteers
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volunteers
and paid workers in four distinct jobs in 2015.
Overall
, the number of volunteers
are
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higher than paid
man
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men
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in coaching, therapists and other sections. Speaking of coaching first. There were more than 70 people doing unpaid work, which was less than twice as much as paid people, at around 44. And
then
, almost 60 people were willing to do
volunteering
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volunteer
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work in other
section
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sections
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. By
comtrast
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contrast
, less than
a
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apply
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half staff
who
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apply
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has
salary
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a salary
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. In terms of Therapists, there
are
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is
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no dramatic gap
on
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between
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non-payment and waged workers, at 45 and
two fifth
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two-fifths
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respectively. In the end, the referees
is
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are
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the only career
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in that
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that
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which
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the number of formal workers,with 40 persons,
surpass
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surpasses
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volunteers which is
one third
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one-third
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.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • volunteers
  • paid workers
  • roles
  • sports sector
  • Australian town
  • duties
  • motivations
  • significance
  • contribution
  • professionalism
  • specialization
  • sustainability
  • distribution
  • trends
  • volunteerism
  • community engagement
  • professional development
  • accessibility
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