The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015.
The column chart illustrates
amount
of Add an article
the amount
voluteers
and paid workers in four distinct jobs in 2015.
Correct your spelling
volunteers
Overall
, the number of volunteers are
higher than paid Change the verb form
is
man
in coaching, therapists and other sections.
Speaking of coaching first. There were more than 70 people doing unpaid work, which was less than twice as much as paid people, at around 44. And Fix the agreement mistake
men
then
, almost 60 people were willing to do volunteering
work in other Replace the word
volunteer
section
. By Fix the agreement mistake
sections
comtrast
, less than Correct your spelling
contrast
a
half staff Correct article usage
apply
who
has Correct pronoun usage
apply
salary
.
In terms of Therapists, there Add an article
a salary
are
no dramatic gap Change the verb form
is
on
non-payment and waged workers, at 45 and Change preposition
between
two fifth
respectively. In the end, the referees Correct your spelling
two-fifths
is
the only career Change the verb form
are
Change preposition
in that
that
the number of formal workers,with 40 persons, Correct pronoun usage
which
surpass
volunteers which is Correct subject-verb agreement
surpasses
one third
.Add a hyphen
one-third
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