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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The
two
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 pie charts compare what and how many
languages
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 English
students
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 spoke at a university located in England over
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 different years, 2000 and 2010.
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, Spanish was more prevalent among
students
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 compared to the other
languages
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 in both years. It is
also
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 clear that
students
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 speaking German stabilised at 10% over the period shown,
while
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 the remaining student groups witnessed significant changes. In 2000, Spanish was spoken by 30% of
students
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, which was
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 the largest proportion in that year.
This
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 was double the figures for French and another
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 and
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 the figures for German and
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 other
languages
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. In comparison, the number of
students
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 who could not communicate in any
language
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 except for the native one was
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 lower but not much, accounting for one-fifth. In 2010, there was a mere 5% rocket in
students
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 speaking Spanish, another
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, and
two
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 other
languages
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 to 35%, 20%, and 15%, respectively. Spanish’s figure continued amounting to the largest percentage in 2010.
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, the figures for no other
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 and French plummeted considerably to 10%, comprising one-fifth of the
students
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 in total.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, languages, students, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • multilingualism
  • globalisation
  • immigration
  • education policy
  • career prospects
  • cultural understanding
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • increased/decreased
  • significant
  • trends
  • shifts
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