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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. In today's job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write at least 250 words.

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In contemporary society, where people easily have access to dozens of vacancies through different
job
 sites, it is very easy to find a
job
.
However
, sometimes the only requirement for application to any
job
 is previous experience. In my opinion, even if the main demand asked by employers is practical
skills
, theoretical
knowledge
 is compulsory to get better improvements. On one
hand
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 if the employee is very
skillful
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 and astute in receiving and implementing, he or she is considered very desired and wanted by any administrative
departments
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department
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.
Nevertheless
, their
knowledge
 of basic information might be very
narrow-shaped
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. So, practical abilities and
skills
 are very essential for any type of
job
 application.
On the other hand
, skillfulness without specific
education
 or theory is not easily seen, because in order to put on work your talent you need to be educated and trained for that,
subsequently
 theoretical
knowledge
 is not only less important but I reckon it is much more crucial than other aspects.
For example
, a lot of people who
hadn’t
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 had any
education
 or training suffer
in
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from
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 being promoted
due to
 the fact that they are not much informed about special systems and discipline. Despite all of that, some governments throughout Europe and North America still ponder how to reduce the influence of theoretical
skills
, by increasing the necessity of soft and practical
skills
. In conclusion, I insistently disagree with the speculation of
reduction
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the
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 importance of
knowledge
 and
education
 in
job
 applications, because I assume that
the
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apply
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one without another would be very useless, so if
the
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apply
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one wants to succeed in his or her career, he/she must get enough information and
education
as well as
 the experience using specific internship and volunteering programs.
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