The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the rates of
females
and Use synonyms
males
who passed the driving exam in a selected Asian country that took place between 1980 and 2010.
At first glance, it is clearly apparent that the number of women who successfully passed the driving test was always higher than men. Use synonyms
Moreover
, the trend for both Linking Words
females
and Use synonyms
males
has shown considerable growth over a 20-year period.
In 1980, approximately 58% of women had succeeded in acquiring a driving licence, which to some extent, Use synonyms
also
made Linking Words
this
initial juncture the lowest rate throughout the whole 20-year period. Linking Words
On the other hand
, Linking Words
males
only registered their number at approximately 28% in 1980, which Use synonyms
also
demonstrated the lowest rate compared to other years.
Upon closer examination Linking Words
to
the figures, in the subsequent two decades, women had shown a dramatic increase, which recorded its peak at approximately 78% in 2000. Change preposition
of
Linking Words
Although
in 2010, the percentage of Correct word choice
However
females
who secured the pass status of the driving exam had dropped slightly by nearly 3%. Use synonyms
However
, the recorded number of Linking Words
females
in 2010 was still two times higher than the percentage of men in the decade before, which only settled at approximately 35%. Use synonyms
Thus
, in the Linking Words
last
10 years, the group of Linking Words
males
Use synonyms
also
experienced a rise noticeably, which ended up at the same Linking Words
rates
, just below 50%.Fix the agreement mistake
rate
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