The bar chart bar gives information about shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan.

The bar chart bar gives information about shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan.
The bar chart depicts the proportion of expenditures for five main categories in the four big
country
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namely,
United
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states
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, Canada,
United
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Kingdom, and Japan.
Overall
, it is clearly apparent that almost in every country, the biggest
expenses
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expense
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is in
the
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housing. Meanwhile, health care and clothing remain
as
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the lowest
expenditure
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expenditures
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. In every country, their consumption of money
diverse
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from each other. In
United
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the United
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States, Canada, and
United
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the United
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Kingdom housing is their biggest
expenditures
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perspectively
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. Meanwhile, food is where Japan outlays their money. For food, Japan occupied nearly 25% and
becoming
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the biggest expenditure in
food
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category.
In contrast
, all four countries spend less
in
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their healthcare and clothes. All four countries except
UK
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the UK
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spend less than 5% of their income
in
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healthcare.
By comparison
,
US
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the US
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spend less
in
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on
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their clothing.
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