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You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In your letter, » explain why you were at the restaurant » describe the problems » write about the action you want the manager to take Write atleast 150words

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Dear manager, I hope
ypu
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you
 are doing well. I am writing
this
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction about your meal. I took my family to your restaurant because we should
to
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celebrate my birthday. We going to your restaurant yesterday at 6:00 pm. We chose your
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restaurant
 because your restaurant had a good or positive comment
in
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 social media.  After I and my family arrived at your place, your waitress
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 the table
we
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 should
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sit. And
than
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 we ordered some
food
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 that
look
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 delicious,
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 as seafood and
asian
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food
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.
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, we should
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food
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so
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 long. After waiting some of the time, our
food
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 has
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finally
 come.
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, we try seafood but
smell
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the smell
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it
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of it
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 is not good. Your seafood like not fresh at all.
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, we should
to waiting
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 for a long time for that
food
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. I hope you
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are supposed
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 to check
you
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 hygiene
at
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in
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 your kitchen.
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 problem would like to
destroyed
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 your place if you
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do not
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 handle
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 program. I am
waiting
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 your positive
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feedback
feadback
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 Best regards

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coherence cohesion
Develop a clear introductory paragraph, stating the purpose of writing. Use cohesive devices to link your ideas more effectively throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Stick to one main idea per paragraph. Begin the first with the reason for the visit, the second with describing the issue, and a third with the action you expect.
task achievement
Fully address all parts of the task. Provide a clear explanation for the visit, detailed description of the problems, and specific actions you desire from the manager.
task achievement
Adopt a more formal and respectful tone when addressing the manager. Avoid using contractions and maintain a polite and formal register throughout the letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unforgettable evening turned disappointing
  • anticipation
  • patronage
  • culinary experience
  • subpar
  • palate
  • lackluster service
  • rectify
  • compensation
  • amicable resolution
  • clientele satisfaction
  • due diligence
  • apology
  • quality assurance
  • redress
  • expectation management
  • constructive feedback
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