The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

You should write at least 150 words.
These pie charts
shows
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the percentage in 1958 and 2008 in a particular country for the time
that
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taken by adults to do their
execrsices
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.It
clear
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from the graphs that the
percent
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of
the
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working was the
hieghest
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highest
for both years.
According to
what is shown,the rate of change of relaxing at home was up by 5%
during
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1958 to 2008,
while
the
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sleeping
was going
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down
about
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(7%)
at
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the same period. As for working, in 1958 travel to work
has
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the least per cent which was 2%, but
then
it became the second least
by
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8%.
Also
, as the travel to work changed by 6%, the working changed by 9%.
To sum up
, we could say that the maximum alternate happened was in part of going out approximately 13% through two years.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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