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The charts below show the proportions of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The presented charts show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other
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 other than English. The data shows a comparison between 2000 and 2010. It is categorized into some of the most spoken
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, including German, French, Spanish, and the rest with no other
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, another
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, or more than 2
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.
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, it can be clearly seen from the two charts above that the biggest fraction was Spanish only, with nearly one-third in both charts.
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 the students that spoke more than two
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, including English, and German only remained the same, both categories had the same proportion at 10%. Another noticeable rise was observed
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 the group of students who spoke no other
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 and less spoken
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 that were not categorized. Upon detailed observation, it was noticed that the only
language
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 that had a slight decrease was French, with a downfall from approximately 15% in 2000 to 10% in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportions" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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