The line graph below displays the unemployment rates among university graduates in Australia, Canada, Germany, and Japan from 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The Line chart depicts the unemployment proportion

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university graduates within 4 countries (Australia, Canada, Germany and Japan)

about

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20 years from 2000 to 2020. In

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hindsight, it can be seen that all of the categories showed

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downward trend.

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, in the early period, Australia started the number of unworked people at 8,

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dramatically to 10 (2008) and

sunddely

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dropped to 7 in 2020.

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, in 2000, beginning at 6 recognised

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Japan. Following that, it

was grow

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to 9 in 2008 and declined over the next 12 years (at 4). In 2000,

Germany

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unemployment numbers stood at 5 and climbed to 8 but

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at the end

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, Canada showed

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fluctuative

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fluctuating

rates

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, it started at 7

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but dropped dramatically at 6 in 2018,

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a peak in 2012 (10) and

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at 6 in 2020, it was far fewer

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japan

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and

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but slightly under Australia.

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