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The line graph below displays the unemployment rates among university graduates in Australia, Canada, Germany, and Japan from 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below displays the unemployment rates among university graduates in Australia, Canada, Germany, and Japan from 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Line chart depicts the unemployment proportion
on
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of
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 university graduates within 4 countries (Australia, Canada, Germany and Japan)
about
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for about
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 20 years from 2000 to 2020. In
a
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apply
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hindsight, it can be seen that all of the categories showed
an
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a
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 downward trend.
Initially
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, in the early period, Australia started the number of unworked people at 8,
then
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rise
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rose
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 dramatically to 10 (2008) and
sunddely
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suddenly
 dropped to 7 in 2020.
Likewise
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, in 2000, beginning at 6 recognised
on
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in
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 Japan. Following that, it
was grow
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grew
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 to 9 in 2008 and declined over the next 12 years (at 4). In 2000,
Germany
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Germany's
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 unemployment numbers stood at 5 and climbed to 8 but
fall
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fell
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at
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to
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 3
at the end
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 of the period (2020).
Conversely
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, Canada showed
an
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a
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fluctuative
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fluctuating
rates
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rate
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, it started at 7
,
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apply
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 but dropped dramatically at 6 in 2018,
then
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reach
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reached
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 a peak in 2012 (10) and
ends
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ended
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 at 6 in 2020, it was far fewer
that
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than
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japan
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Japan
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 and
germany
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Germany
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 but slightly under Australia.

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