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The charts below show the proportions of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart gives comparisons between the number of British pupils in an academic institution in England who mastered various languages other than English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, all languages were distributed disproportionately among students for ten
years
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 of observation.
Moreover
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, Spanish
shared
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had
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 the most speakers in those
years
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,
while
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 no other language, French, two other languages, and German had the lowest users. At the top level, In 2000, the Spanish and other language experts showed significantly different data, with a 50% gap. In the next ten
years
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, both dialect lovers rose gradually by one-twenty to 35 and 20 points, respectively.
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, there was a moderate decline in the number of people who studied no other English and French in 2010, reaching only 10% of all British students. On top of that, the former had five more undergraduates than the latter spoke in 2000.
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, only German and two other language users
leveled
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levelled
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 off for ten
years
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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