The hotel were you and your family spent the weekend did not offer the service they had promised. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: • Introduce yourself. • Explain the problem. • State what action you would like from the hotel. Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam Hope you are doing well. I write
this
letter to express my dissatisfaction about your poor service during me and my family in your
hotel
. Let me introduce
my self
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myself
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, I am Vijay and I booked your
hotel
for my
parents
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parent's
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wedding anniversary. I was looking for
hotel
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a hotel
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that
provide
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provides
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birthday
cakes
and I found your
hotel
on social media and
then
I decided to
booked
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book
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your
hotel
. Me and my family arrived
in
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at
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your
hotel
at
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on
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23 April 2020 around 10:00 am. At that time I asked your staff about my birthday
cakes
but she told me if the cake
not
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was not
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done yet.
Moreover
, I would like to
gave
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give
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my
parents
surprise
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a surprise
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. I waited around 4
hour
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hours
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for the
cakes
. After waiting for a long time,
finaly
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finally
my
cakes
it is already
to serve
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served
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. But I think there is wrong with
that
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those
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cakes
, because that's
cakes
not
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do not
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look
likes
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like
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a birthday
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birthday cakes
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cakes
.
On the other hand
, they did not write my
parents
' names on the cake even
I
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though I
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request
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requested
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them to write my
parents
' names on the top of
cakes
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the cakes
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. I am completely
dissapointed
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disappointed
with your service. I would like you to refund my money or you could
to
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apply
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give me an extra time to stay overnight at your
hotel
. I am looking forward to your positive response Best Regards, Joy
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a single idea clearly and concisely; avoid mixing multiple thoughts in one paragraph. This will improve the logical flow and comprehensibility.
Coherence and Cohesion
Utilize linking words and transitions appropriately to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs, thereby enhancing the cohesion of the letter.
Task Achievement
Adopt a more formal tone throughout the letter to suit the nature of a complaint to a hotel manager; avoid casual language and ensure grammatical accuracy.
Task Achievement
Carefully address all the points of the task: Introduce yourself in a more formal manner, describe the problem concisely and make your desired outcome clear.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Disheartening
  • Unavailability
  • Inadequate
  • Compensation
  • Rectify
  • Subpar
  • Discrepancy
  • Hospitality
  • Conveying dissatisfaction
  • Anticipated services
  • Constructive feedback
  • Amicably resolve
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