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The charts below show the proportions of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart compares the number of British
students
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 who could speak foreign
languages
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 in the years 2000 and 2010.
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, there were
students
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 who were able to speak French, Spanish, German and other
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, including some who knew even two other
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 in
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both years .
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, some
students
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 could use only their native language, but
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 percentage had decreased by the end of the decade.
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, in 2000, 30% of
students
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 could communicate in Spanish, which increased to 35% in 2010, accounting for the highest proportions in the charts.
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, only 15% of individuals were fluent in another language in 2000, reaching
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20% in 2010. Despite the fact that 15% of British spoke French in 2000,
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 number had decreased to 10% by 2010.
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, those who did not communicate in any other
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 had a declining tendency from 20%(in 2000) to just 10%. The number for those who were multilingual stayed unchanged at 10%, in both 2000 and 2010.

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