The charts below show the proportions of British students at oen university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at oen university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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the percentages
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in British who
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speak
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other languages in
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university between 2000 and 2010. From a holistic standpoint, it was noticeable that the
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who is able to speak
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dominant compared to
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. Looking in detail the proportion data of England
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primary number of percentages at least more than a half. A
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-third
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only compared to other
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proficiency. The value of
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was stable throughout
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15%
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who
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to 10% in 2010.
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was a dominant number almost
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-fourth compared to other categories.
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doubled
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.
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who
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able to speak
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began at 10%
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upward slightly to 15%.
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who have
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another
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rose from 15% to 20%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words one, student, language with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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