The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart illustrates how much
adults
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spent their time on six types of activities (working, sleeping, going out, relaxing at home,
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to work, and other interests) in two different
year
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(1958 and 2008). The data is presented in percentages. In general, working was the most popular activity that
adults
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engaged in both 1958 and 2008.
In contrast
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, travel to work was the least activity that
adults
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spend in
those year
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that year
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. In 1958, most
adults
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preferred to spend their time working with
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total
percentage
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of 33%, followed by sleeping with a
percentage
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of around 32%, and going out (19%).
Moreover
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, the rest activities
such
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as other interests, relaxing at home, and travel to work, had a low
percentage
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below 10%, with total percentages of 19%, 8%, and 6% of each. In 2008, working still had the highest
percentage
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with a total of 42%, an increase from 1958. Meanwhile, sleeping only had a total
percentage
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of 25%, a decrease of around 7% compared to 1958.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words adults, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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