The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The chart illustrates how much
adults
spent their time on six types of activities (working, sleeping, going out, relaxing at home,
travel
Wrong verb form
travelling
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to work, and other interests) in two different
year
Change to a plural noun
years
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(1958 and 2008). The data is presented in percentages. In general, working was the most popular activity that
adults
engaged in both 1958 and 2008.
In contrast
, travel to work was the least activity that
adults
spend in
those year
Change the determiner
that year
those years
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. In 1958, most
adults
preferred to spend their time working with
the
Correct article usage
a
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total
percentage
of 33%, followed by sleeping with a
percentage
of around 32%, and going out (19%).
Moreover
, the rest activities
such
as other interests, relaxing at home, and travel to work, had a low
percentage
below 10%, with total percentages of 19%, 8%, and 6% of each. In 2008, working still had the highest
percentage
with a total of 42%, an increase from 1958. Meanwhile, sleeping only had a total
percentage
of 25%, a decrease of around 7% compared to 1958.
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