The bar chart below shows the percentage of australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the infromation by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart below illustrates the percentage of Australian
men
and women
in different age groups doing physical activities in 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that there was a fall in athletes after the age of 24, dumping from almost 53 percent
to 42.
In 15 to 24, Change the spelling
per cent
men
exercise more than women
, with a 5 percent
difference. Change the spelling
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However
, from 25 to 64, women
are more active in physical exercises than men
, with an average of 52 compared to 42 respectively. In the mid-thirties to mid-forties, women
have the most overtaking from men
, with a 13 percent
difference. From 45 to 64, Change the spelling
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women
peaked at 53 percent
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men
's physical activities from 43 to 45. As you can see, both in their Retirement years were nearly equal, with 47 percent
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exercisation
.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
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men
did more regular physical activities than women
when they were teenagers and in the middle.
The twenties. After the mid-twenties, women
were extremely more active than men
in exercise.Submitted by bahram.azizzade on
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