The chart below illustrates the children, men, women rate who ate five portions of fruit and vegatables daily in the UK between 2001 and 2008.

The chart below illustrates the children, men, women rate who ate five portions of fruit and vegatables daily in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
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of children, men, and women who ate five portions of fruit and vegetable daily
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2001 and 2008.
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portion is always eaten by women, with men coming in second. Consistently, children always ranked
last
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eaten has increased for all three categories. From 2001 to 2006, the amount eaten by men and women has a sizeable gap. The gap dropped to around 3-4 the following year.
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  • Demographic groups
  • Consumption rates
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Stable or fluctuating intake
  • Dietary recommendations
  • Public health campaigns
  • Availability of fresh produce
  • Health outcomes
  • Obesity rates
  • Heart disease
  • Diet-related conditions
  • Further research
  • Public health policy
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