WORK: Most high level positions in companies are filled by men, even though the workforce in many developed countries consists of 50 percent female workers. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of management positions to women. Discuss, what is your opinion?
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There is no doubt that intellectually
women
are equal to the
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apply
men
. Many business
establishment
around the globe, undeniably,Change to a plural noun
establishments
managing
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managed
male
, despite the fact that 50 percent of Fix the agreement mistake
males
workforce
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the workforce
are
female. some people Correct subject-verb agreement
is
subsrcribe
to the idea that Correct your spelling
subscribe
the
certain percentage of management Correct article usage
a
position
should be reserved for Fix the agreement mistake
positions
women
. I strongly agree
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agree to
agree with
this
view, and this
essy
will delve into both viewpoints with relevant examples.
First and foremost, the people who advocate for Correct your spelling
essay
men
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men's
dominancy
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dominance
is
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in
business
claim that Add an article
the business
a business
majority
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the majority
females
are incapable of pressure. Change preposition
of females
In other words
, since the business
sector in the modern world is highly competative
comparing the bygone Correct your spelling
competitive
day
, there would be an immense cappasity to Fix the agreement mistake
days
handle
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handling
business
. As
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Women
women
are less competent to handle the high pressure, which is scientifically proven. For example
, accroding
to Correct your spelling
according
the
recent study by the University of Harvard, a well-known university, in Correct article usage
a
marketing
sector indicated that Correct article usage
the marketing
men
are 40
% higher success rate than Correct article usage
a 40
women
. Moreover
, women
are reluctant to change, in the contemporary world, fast adaptation of
change is vital to survive the Change preposition
to
business
. Although
women
have limitations to success, I belive
that Correct your spelling
believe
womens
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women
have
equally considered as Verb problem
are
men
and uplift them.
Nevetheless
, the modern society Correct your spelling
Nevertheless
women
have equal right
to Fix the agreement mistake
rights
men
which should be applicable in all areas including business
sector. Add an article
the business
In other words
, the companies may develop polices
to reserve management positions to Correct your spelling
policies
women
equal to men
. By doing this
the companies
social profile will Change noun form
company's
boost
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be boosted
up
. Change preposition
apply
For example
, the multi-national business
establishment Pepsico has been running
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run
women
leadership which provides the company a
global Add the preposition
with a
prespective
that they are Correct your spelling
perspective
women
friendly, therfore
, several female experts around the world are attracted to the company. Correct your spelling
therefore
Similarly
, Since the
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apply
women
are good at manage
human resources compared to Change the verb form
managing
men
, the business
will attract more pottential
employees which should not be overlooked.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
potential
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women
have less tolerence
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tolerance
to
pressure and resist Change preposition
for
to
change, Change preposition
apply
the
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women
's right
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rights
women
leadership will attract Change noun form
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