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The charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison when relevant.

The charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison when relevant.
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The charts
gives
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 information about
destination
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 of UK postgraduates and graduates in 2008 can choose. As
it
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apply
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mentioned above, there are 4
destination
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: part-time
work
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, voluntary
work
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,
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futher
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further
study
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 and unemployment.
Overall
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, the number of
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futher
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further
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study
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studies
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 in
these two comparison
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 is the highest,
while
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 voluntary
work
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 is the smallest.
Graduates
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Graduate
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 UK
student
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students
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 who
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were interest
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interest
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 in part-time
work
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 was 17,735. The number of voluntary
work
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 was 3,500, which
the
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 smallest.
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Futher
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Further
study
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 and unemployment reach 29,665 and 16,235. On
other
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the other
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 hand,
postgraduates
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postgraduate
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 UK
student
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students
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 had a
biggest
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bigger
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 interest in
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futher
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further
study
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 than voluntary
work
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.
Besides
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, part-time
work
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 and unemployment have 2,535 and 1,625 interest.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, futher, study with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate and postgraduate students
  • full-time work
  • further study
  • part-time work
  • voluntary work
  • engagement levels
  • trend analysis
  • financial needs
  • social consciousness
  • practical experience
  • personal growth
  • international exposure
  • gap period
  • unemployed
  • economic reasons
  • career paths
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