The charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison when relevant.

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The presented bar graphs delineate the destination which was selected by graduates and postgraduates in the United Kingdom in 2008. In general, it is conspicuous that

further

study

was the most popular destination among people graduating from university;

hovever

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however

most of them did not prefer to choose

voluntery

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voluntary

volunteer

work

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for

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their future jobs. Turning to the top two categories, both graduates and postgraduates selected

further

study

as the most favourable option to

work

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with

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29,665 for

postgraduate

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postgraduates

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and 2,725 for

undergraduate

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undergraduates

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This

number was followed by part-time

work

that

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apply

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placed in

the

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apply

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second place,

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apply

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contributing just above a half lower for individuals finishing

study

from

postgraduate

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the postgraduate

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program, and 2,535 for another criterion. As regards the rest of the categories, In 2008, nearly 1,625 people were unemployed after

accomplising

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accomplishing

their

study

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studies

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In addition

voluntery

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voluntary

volunteer

work

became the least selection by generating 3.500 participants from graduate students and 345 for postgraduate students in the United Kingdom.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words study, work with synonyms.

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2Word repetition
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3 paragraphs

155 words

5.50

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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