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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In the letter: explain why you were at the restaurant describe the problems write about the action you want the manager to take You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as: Dear Sir or Madam, You should write at least 150 words.

#minutes #restaurant #manager #action #address #sir #madam
Dear Manager, I am writing
this
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complaint
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 about the meal, me and my family had at your restaurant.I was at your restaurant on the 5th of December to celebrate my daughter's birthday and I made a reservation before we arrived and in
note
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the note
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section
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 I
have
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apply
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mentioned that me and my family
allergic
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are allergic
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for
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to
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sea
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seafood
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food
.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,we ordered
Cabonara
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Carbonara
,Rissotto and pizzas and I
have
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specifically mentioned to one of your staff not to add
sea
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seafood
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food
 and
instead
 of seafood,I asked to add
a meat
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meat
a slice of meat
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.Unfortunately,when
food
 arrived,we noticed
sea
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seafood
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food
were
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was
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 in one of our
kids
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kid's
kids'
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meal
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meals
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 and my daughter
has
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had
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 already
ate
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eaten
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 and later she was sick for 5 days .
Me
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I
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 and my husband
has
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have
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 complained to the manager but he didn't seem to
be cared
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care
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.
Moreover
,the
cabonara
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carbonara
 we ordered was too dry and
no
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not
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 enough salt. I would like you to take
an
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action regarding the issue where and refund at least 50% of the amount we paid. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Marry Hike
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to organize your letter into clear paragraphs, each addressing a specific point (e.g., one for the reason of the visit, one for the description of the problem, and one for the action required).
coherence cohesion
Use a range of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly and to help your letter flow better.
task achievement
Address every point in the task appropriately. While you have explained the problem and the action you want, it would help to elaborate a bit more on the reason for the celebration at the restaurant for a complete response to the task.
task achievement
Be consistent with the language and level of formality throughout your letter. Choose a tone that is polite yet assertive when making a complaint.
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