The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph provides information about the
food
consumption
per individual per
kg
,
such
as vegetables, fruit,
meat
, bread, and seafood, in Australia over a ten-year period from 1950 to 2010.
Overall
, by 2010,
consumption
had increased in all
food
categories except for
meat
, which had declined. The most popular
food
which was eaten by Australians in the given period of time was vegetables.
Although
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it can be seen from the graph that the line fluctuated,
however
,
at the end
, there were still 160
kg
of vegetables consumed in 2010. For
meat
consumption
, in 1950, about 110
kg
was consumed per person annually. There was a decline in
meat
consumption
from 1980 to 2000.
Initially
,
meat
was the second most popular,
however
, there was a significant drop, and the result was
meat
ranked third in 2010. The
consumption
of fruit which was 30
kg
below the
meat
made a dramatic increase in 1970-2010, making fruit the second most popular
food
. From 1950-1970, the
consumption
of bread rose moderately,
however
, in 1970-2000, it plummeted until 2000 and it
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to have a slight increase
at the end
.
In contrast
, there were no significant changes
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seafood
consumption
as the line shows steady growth.
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